Alright awesome! Thanks Grievous for helping me get this up! I am OBSESSED with fanfiction. If you ever need advice on a story or anything, just let me know!
Anyway, this is my first official, finished fanfic. It is published on Fanfiction.net, if you'd rather read it there, but I'll be glad to post it here! And I'd LOVE to hear your thoughts on it as well!!!!
Here we go.....Chapter 1!!!! BTW, this story is MOSTLY Original Characters that I made up. Some of the same villains and stuff, but most of them I made up. Partially-Canon. XD
Prelude
She bent over the cradle; a single tear rolling down her cheek. Gently Marlinda picked up her tiny baby girl and looked lovingly into her deep emerald eyes. The small pudgy baby cooed in her mother’s arms. Soon, there was a knock on the door.
Anxious, Marlinda hurried to open it. She cracked open the door to find a tall female red-skinned alien. Dressed in elegant robes and a tunic with a belt, the female introduced herself as Shaak Ti, Jedi Knight. Shaak Ti was a species called Togruta, from the planet Shili. Togrutans had long blue and white head tails, which resembled human hair in some respects.
As the Dantooine prairie winds battered her cloak and robes, Marlinda invited the exotic Jedi into her humble hut-like home. Squeezing her eyes shut in a fruitless effort to stop the tears flowing from them, she turned to face the Jedi Master and Marlinda spoke.
“Master Jedi, I know that my child is Force sensitive. One of your fellow Jedi Knights told me of it on a mission here to Dantooine. I have decided to give my darling baby up to the Jedi Temple in hopes you will train her to use and understand her unique powers.” Marlinda finished, choking a sob.
After a moment, Shaak Ti spoke, “Madame Marlinda Sunstar, the Jedi Order thanks you, and we can promise you that your child will be taken care of. We will teach her and train her as our own. That is the Jedi Way.”
She smiled at Marlinda as the baby was placed in her arms. The little baby’s vibrant green eyes snapped open, and upon noticing the woman holding her was not her mother, she began to cry. Shaak Ti rocked the baby softly in her arms. Marlinda walked the Jedi and her precious baby back to the Jedi’s star-ship, where they began to say goodbye. Marlinda held her baby close one last time, and as her lips kissed the baby’s soft cheek, Marlinda whispered to her child.
“Goodbye my darling, I will always love you, my Marilee” and with that she carried her baby into the Jedi’s ship, placed her in the prepared cradle and walked back down the loading ramp. Standing in the doorway of her home, Marlinda watched the Jedi take off and continued to watch the ship until it blinked from the sky. Only then did she fall to the ground and weep.
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20 YEARS LATER...
Jedi Master Shaak Ti walked quickly and with purpose down the rough flagstone corridors of the revered Jedi Temple on Coruscant. Upon reaching The Room of a Thousand Fountains she swept inside. Near a small clearing of soft yellow-green grass sat her former Padawan, Marilee Sunstar deep in mediation.
“Greetings Master Ti,” Marilee’s melodic voice called out to her once master, “I can sense you have something important to tell me.” Shaak smiled and nodded her head, head-tails swaying.
“Yes, my old Padawan, you and I have both been called on a mission. Our presence is expected in the Grand Council Chambers immediately.” Marilee blinked her evergreen eyes open.
“A mission? Together?” she asked remembering old times with her master. Shaak Ti nodded again and a bubbly Marilee exclaimed, “Then let’s go!”
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The Grand Council Chamber was spacious yet simply decorated. Jedi Masters Yoda, Mace Windu, Plo Koon, and Ki-Adi-Mundi were present in the chamber. Several holographic images provided the presence of multiple other masters whose holograms flickered in the early morning sun, which shone through the large window.
“Master Ti, Knight Sunstar, we have a request for you” Master Windu said.
“Throughout the Galaxy the Clone Wars has spread. Return to Kamino you two must. Need training the new clones do.” Master Yoda finished, folding his diminutive hands in his lap. Marilee could hardly contain her excitement and joy. She loved Kamino. Whenever she was on Kamino, she felt like she was sincerely making a difference to the war effort by training up new soldiers and preparing them for the current and coming battles against the Separatists. She loved to help and spend time with the clones, befriending them.
She was “officially” called “Commander Sunstar” when she was there, but in private with the clones they called her Master Jedi or just Mari. She only half-listened as Master Mundi explained their importance to the war by training new squadrons of clone troopers. Mari listened more intently when she felt Mace Windu’s piercing stare looking straight at her. When Master Mundi finished speaking Master Windu told the team that they would depart in two hours standard time.
Marilee could hardly wait She bowed respectfully and followed Master Ti out of the room. She could already hear the “plit, plit, plink” of the Kaminoan rain.
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“Plit, plit, plink, plit, plit, plink” rain thundered and pelted the metal dome of the clone trooper barracks. Shadow sat cleaning his weapon in a corner of his squad’s barracks. As he wiped his gun clean after a day full of training the rest of his squad came in from the mess hall.
Still talking and laughing about the havoc of the “mess”, the crew of clones saw Shadow sitting alone, looking distraught. Shadow was a special clone; he felt feelings his brothers didn’t feel. War was not something he was good at; in fact he hated to fight. He became depressed after witnessing the deaths of so many of his brothers and decided to protest against fighting.
This caused some of the Kaminoans to think that he was a defective clone and sent him to “detention” on Kamino, making him help take care of young clone cadets. After two months of that tedious work, Shadow was sent back out to the battlefield where he kept his mouth shut. Yet he couldn’t stop himself from thinking that there was more to life, well, at least his life, than blasting battle droids to bits. His thoughts were interrupted by Dagger, one of the men in his squad.
“Where were ‘ya Shadow? Didn’t see ‘ya in the mess.”
Shadow rolled his eyes and simply said, “I wasn’t hungry.”
Zipper, one of the other clones in the squad looked at Shadow and laughed, “Kept in your growth chamber too long, eh Shadow?”
“I said I wasn’t hungry,” Shadow muttered, turning away from his brothers who constantly mocked him.
“Oh come on boys, Lay off,” said Longshot, another brother from the Delta Squad,
“We’ve got to greet a bunch on Jedi anyway. Let’s get going boys.”
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The Jedi starship landed on the water world of Kamino in the middle of a terrible torrential downpour. Rushing inside as to get out of the rain, Shaak Ti and Marilee Sunstar ran into the white, sparkling clean looking lobby of the Clone Reproduction Facility.
The Kaminoan Cloning Facility was a like a floating building in the middle of the ocean. The rocking waves didn’t seem to bother the fiercely strong metal of the facility’s walls though, as it was stronger than steel.
Two Kaminoan Leaders, two Clone Commanders, and two Clone Trooper Squadrons greeted the soggy Jedi as they entered the building. Immediately recognizing the two Commanders, Marilee excitedly greeted them.
“Rocky, Spike!! So good to see you again!” She shook their hands and continued to greet the two squads, Aqua and Delta, two of the three squads that she trained herself. Even though she shook each clone’s hand, one clone’s shake felt different from the rest. Shadow’s. The Force surged from this clone. Was he Force-sensitive? His embrace wasn’t hard and stiff, instead it was rather warm, kind and friendly. Mari was surprised, but hid it from her face. The Kaminoan leaders asked to speak to Shaak in private and offered to give her a tour of the new wings of the facility, leaving Mari alone to spend time with “her” clones.
“Commander Mari!” exclaimed Longshot of Delta Squad, after the Kaminoans left with Master Ti.
“You came back! We knew you would.” said Ink, another excited clone.
“Zipper, Dagger, Longshot, Ink and Shadow! I’m so glad to be back, it’s nice to see my boys again! And Aqua squad, Jet, Flash, Dax, Flame, Split and Skimmer, it’s nice to see you again too! How have all ‘ya boys been?!?”
All the clones smiled, Mari’s cheerful personality was contagious even in the thick of war-time. Ink replied, “We are holding our own Commander, though the war takes its toll on us clones.”
“Agreed, Commander, we have had no breaks from the war. We only arrived home to Kamino yesterday.” Zipper chimed in.
“We were on our way to the training field” said Longshot.
“Care to join us?” asked Shadow politely.
“Why yes,” Mari answered taking his awaiting arm “I would be honored to join you.”
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I hope you enjoyed it! Please review in the Review Thread (that I will make right now) and let me know.
Anyway, this is my first official, finished fanfic. It is published on Fanfiction.net, if you'd rather read it there, but I'll be glad to post it here! And I'd LOVE to hear your thoughts on it as well!!!!
Here we go.....Chapter 1!!!! BTW, this story is MOSTLY Original Characters that I made up. Some of the same villains and stuff, but most of them I made up. Partially-Canon. XD
Prelude
She bent over the cradle; a single tear rolling down her cheek. Gently Marlinda picked up her tiny baby girl and looked lovingly into her deep emerald eyes. The small pudgy baby cooed in her mother’s arms. Soon, there was a knock on the door.
Anxious, Marlinda hurried to open it. She cracked open the door to find a tall female red-skinned alien. Dressed in elegant robes and a tunic with a belt, the female introduced herself as Shaak Ti, Jedi Knight. Shaak Ti was a species called Togruta, from the planet Shili. Togrutans had long blue and white head tails, which resembled human hair in some respects.
As the Dantooine prairie winds battered her cloak and robes, Marlinda invited the exotic Jedi into her humble hut-like home. Squeezing her eyes shut in a fruitless effort to stop the tears flowing from them, she turned to face the Jedi Master and Marlinda spoke.
“Master Jedi, I know that my child is Force sensitive. One of your fellow Jedi Knights told me of it on a mission here to Dantooine. I have decided to give my darling baby up to the Jedi Temple in hopes you will train her to use and understand her unique powers.” Marlinda finished, choking a sob.
After a moment, Shaak Ti spoke, “Madame Marlinda Sunstar, the Jedi Order thanks you, and we can promise you that your child will be taken care of. We will teach her and train her as our own. That is the Jedi Way.”
She smiled at Marlinda as the baby was placed in her arms. The little baby’s vibrant green eyes snapped open, and upon noticing the woman holding her was not her mother, she began to cry. Shaak Ti rocked the baby softly in her arms. Marlinda walked the Jedi and her precious baby back to the Jedi’s star-ship, where they began to say goodbye. Marlinda held her baby close one last time, and as her lips kissed the baby’s soft cheek, Marlinda whispered to her child.
“Goodbye my darling, I will always love you, my Marilee” and with that she carried her baby into the Jedi’s ship, placed her in the prepared cradle and walked back down the loading ramp. Standing in the doorway of her home, Marlinda watched the Jedi take off and continued to watch the ship until it blinked from the sky. Only then did she fall to the ground and weep.
……………….
20 YEARS LATER...
Jedi Master Shaak Ti walked quickly and with purpose down the rough flagstone corridors of the revered Jedi Temple on Coruscant. Upon reaching The Room of a Thousand Fountains she swept inside. Near a small clearing of soft yellow-green grass sat her former Padawan, Marilee Sunstar deep in mediation.
“Greetings Master Ti,” Marilee’s melodic voice called out to her once master, “I can sense you have something important to tell me.” Shaak smiled and nodded her head, head-tails swaying.
“Yes, my old Padawan, you and I have both been called on a mission. Our presence is expected in the Grand Council Chambers immediately.” Marilee blinked her evergreen eyes open.
“A mission? Together?” she asked remembering old times with her master. Shaak Ti nodded again and a bubbly Marilee exclaimed, “Then let’s go!”
……………….
The Grand Council Chamber was spacious yet simply decorated. Jedi Masters Yoda, Mace Windu, Plo Koon, and Ki-Adi-Mundi were present in the chamber. Several holographic images provided the presence of multiple other masters whose holograms flickered in the early morning sun, which shone through the large window.
“Master Ti, Knight Sunstar, we have a request for you” Master Windu said.
“Throughout the Galaxy the Clone Wars has spread. Return to Kamino you two must. Need training the new clones do.” Master Yoda finished, folding his diminutive hands in his lap. Marilee could hardly contain her excitement and joy. She loved Kamino. Whenever she was on Kamino, she felt like she was sincerely making a difference to the war effort by training up new soldiers and preparing them for the current and coming battles against the Separatists. She loved to help and spend time with the clones, befriending them.
She was “officially” called “Commander Sunstar” when she was there, but in private with the clones they called her Master Jedi or just Mari. She only half-listened as Master Mundi explained their importance to the war by training new squadrons of clone troopers. Mari listened more intently when she felt Mace Windu’s piercing stare looking straight at her. When Master Mundi finished speaking Master Windu told the team that they would depart in two hours standard time.
Marilee could hardly wait She bowed respectfully and followed Master Ti out of the room. She could already hear the “plit, plit, plink” of the Kaminoan rain.
………….
“Plit, plit, plink, plit, plit, plink” rain thundered and pelted the metal dome of the clone trooper barracks. Shadow sat cleaning his weapon in a corner of his squad’s barracks. As he wiped his gun clean after a day full of training the rest of his squad came in from the mess hall.
Still talking and laughing about the havoc of the “mess”, the crew of clones saw Shadow sitting alone, looking distraught. Shadow was a special clone; he felt feelings his brothers didn’t feel. War was not something he was good at; in fact he hated to fight. He became depressed after witnessing the deaths of so many of his brothers and decided to protest against fighting.
This caused some of the Kaminoans to think that he was a defective clone and sent him to “detention” on Kamino, making him help take care of young clone cadets. After two months of that tedious work, Shadow was sent back out to the battlefield where he kept his mouth shut. Yet he couldn’t stop himself from thinking that there was more to life, well, at least his life, than blasting battle droids to bits. His thoughts were interrupted by Dagger, one of the men in his squad.
“Where were ‘ya Shadow? Didn’t see ‘ya in the mess.”
Shadow rolled his eyes and simply said, “I wasn’t hungry.”
Zipper, one of the other clones in the squad looked at Shadow and laughed, “Kept in your growth chamber too long, eh Shadow?”
“I said I wasn’t hungry,” Shadow muttered, turning away from his brothers who constantly mocked him.
“Oh come on boys, Lay off,” said Longshot, another brother from the Delta Squad,
“We’ve got to greet a bunch on Jedi anyway. Let’s get going boys.”
……………
The Jedi starship landed on the water world of Kamino in the middle of a terrible torrential downpour. Rushing inside as to get out of the rain, Shaak Ti and Marilee Sunstar ran into the white, sparkling clean looking lobby of the Clone Reproduction Facility.
The Kaminoan Cloning Facility was a like a floating building in the middle of the ocean. The rocking waves didn’t seem to bother the fiercely strong metal of the facility’s walls though, as it was stronger than steel.
Two Kaminoan Leaders, two Clone Commanders, and two Clone Trooper Squadrons greeted the soggy Jedi as they entered the building. Immediately recognizing the two Commanders, Marilee excitedly greeted them.
“Rocky, Spike!! So good to see you again!” She shook their hands and continued to greet the two squads, Aqua and Delta, two of the three squads that she trained herself. Even though she shook each clone’s hand, one clone’s shake felt different from the rest. Shadow’s. The Force surged from this clone. Was he Force-sensitive? His embrace wasn’t hard and stiff, instead it was rather warm, kind and friendly. Mari was surprised, but hid it from her face. The Kaminoan leaders asked to speak to Shaak in private and offered to give her a tour of the new wings of the facility, leaving Mari alone to spend time with “her” clones.
“Commander Mari!” exclaimed Longshot of Delta Squad, after the Kaminoans left with Master Ti.
“You came back! We knew you would.” said Ink, another excited clone.
“Zipper, Dagger, Longshot, Ink and Shadow! I’m so glad to be back, it’s nice to see my boys again! And Aqua squad, Jet, Flash, Dax, Flame, Split and Skimmer, it’s nice to see you again too! How have all ‘ya boys been?!?”
All the clones smiled, Mari’s cheerful personality was contagious even in the thick of war-time. Ink replied, “We are holding our own Commander, though the war takes its toll on us clones.”
“Agreed, Commander, we have had no breaks from the war. We only arrived home to Kamino yesterday.” Zipper chimed in.
“We were on our way to the training field” said Longshot.
“Care to join us?” asked Shadow politely.
“Why yes,” Mari answered taking his awaiting arm “I would be honored to join you.”
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I hope you enjoyed it! Please review in the Review Thread (that I will make right now) and let me know.